Kate is a woman who full of
cheerfulness before he was blind. Not her eyes but her soul. She was wrong in
choosing someone, to be a brother, sharing friends or you could say a couple.
How can she trusted with man a humorist. She thought he was a warm, loving,
friendly, well, and so on.
Once again, kate doesn't know why
she can define that in her eyes the man was very good. Yes, kate can only say in
his hearts "That everything you see, ain't always what it seems."
Because everything changed black and ugly after she saw he was a liar large.
"Hey, I liked you more than
kate. I just make it as my toy. " a man speaking on a woman.
"No kidding again. Start now
keep away from her." responsible that woman.
"Is it a request which
should be done? " ask him again.
"Yes!" and once again
that woman answer him with firmly.
"All right."
Hear
the talks the two person, makes kate very sad. Because the two person were
friends of her own. After heard that conversation, she recent knew that all the
sweet word the man, is actually a lie.
Then the days next this man was away from kate without the good reason.
All
this problem make war inward in her heart "wouldn't dive in, wouldn 't bow
down. You made it so sweet. On the concrete." And all this fact make it
from falling in sorrow made his heart sick and closed. "I wish I knew then,
what I know now" she would not be cold and wreak her resentment against men
and the another friend.
***
"I
am born again" after so long kate closed her heart. Now finally she has
found his successor better. All her past dismal including memories with bitter,
her had wasted far. And finally kate started opening of a new to transcribe a
story more beautiful than ever. "The story's over now, the end."
"everything we see, not necessarily same as fact"
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Nice story . :D
Don't forget to using Past tense (V2) dear.. :)
"Kate is a woman who full of cheerfulness before he went blind:" --> Kate was a woman who full....."
I know that dong : Wide Awake from Katy Perry.. :D
May be,,
from Katy Perry ( Wide Awake )
I think so.. Katy Perry Wide Awake. because you add a lyrics too, that easy to searching..and "from Kate" Hehe
I'm agree with Ningrum, you should using past tense aish, it's a narrative, right?
Um,,, I love the song that you choose, Katy Perry - Wide Awake :p
Nice story aish, keep it up :)
He he he he ......
You story get people who are interested in reading it.
Is it the core of the story was about lies, betrayal and destruction of the household of ex-husband?
haha, that's interesting,,
and yes, you should using past tense in narrative :)
I think it was answered :D "Wide Awake from Katy Perry" :D
(‾ʃƪ‾) Thank's all, for your suggestion and comments.
your suggestion can help me to learn better. (9ˇ▼ˇ)9
wow... it's good story..
but , i'm agree with opinion they all..
and I think the title it seems have answered ...
so I agree too it .. heheh :)
maybe Wide Awake by Katty Perry
nicee story ais :)
in fact your body of paragraph is good because it consist of conversation and paragraph that may make it clear enough, and i also appreciate with you because you use many new vocabulary too...
thank you
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